Assignment #15

I've learned a lot as writer through my writing 101 class. I've learned things such as organizing papers better, creating strong thesis statements, avoiding sentence fragments, and adding specific details and examples to help support my claims. I liked this class overall because it helped me improve in areas that I was having trouble in. My previous writing classes would just just assign an essay and a rubric in hopes that the students would accomplish what the teacher asked of them. On the other hand, in this course I liked how we wrote drafts, pier reviewed them, and then had the final draft due a couple days after. I like this because with a rough draft you can build, add, take out, and prefect your paper with your classmates. It was also nice that we had a chance to read other peoples papers so we had a feel of what our own paper is supposed to look like. Overall, this course has helped me immensely on becoming a better writer in general. I've learned different ways and techniques to make my papers better overall. I've also gotten a chance to read some of my piers amazing essays. Something I really likes about his course was that we got a chance to write a draft before our final paper was due. I think that helped me the most because my drafts have never been all that. It usually takes me a couple drafts to really perfect my papers so that I feel like they are fully complete and ready to hand in.

Assignment #14

For my portfolio I chose to revise my writing process essay. I chose this one because it's an essay that was personal to me so which ever way i choose to revise it, it will be stronger. My strengths of this essay were that i added a lot of specific and personal detail and my weakness was my conclusion. I say this because I think i could have summed everything up in a better way that was more appealing to the reader. To effectively revise my essay I will go through each paragraph to make sure it relates back to my thesis and makes sense.

Assignment #13

I analyzed Malikas essay, in her essay she used a straight forward approach to grab the readers attention right away. She was arguing that teenagers should not get tattoos at such early ages. This will then lead to problems in the future such as your own kids wanting tattoos or even being prevented form being hired at a job because of a tattoo. This thought me that I should use a straight forward approach to really get the attention of my reader. It also thought me that I should use specific examples to get my point across.

Assignment #12

• The strongest evidence is my claim that everyone should live a healthy lifestyle because it leads to a happy more bright future. It's strong evidence because it pertains to everyone. Everyone wants to be healthy and fit. Health and fitness are the two most important aspects of a brighter future. Since my claim is good I'm going to come back to it multiple times during the course of my paper.
• My weakest evidence is my rebuttal which would be its not easy to live a healthy lifestyle.Most people now a days are lazy and don't have time to make healthy food or exercise properly. I will strengthen this part of my essay by telling the reader that you live a longer life if you stay healthy. I mean no one wants to live to only 25 I'm sure. You control what you eat so your health is on you.

Assignment #9

                                                                       College Experience

My college experience this semester and a half has been a memorable one. I say this because I've met new people, you have more freedom, and your getting closer to establishing your future. I've still kept some of my friends from high school, but most of my good friends are the people i have met this year in college. I like getting to know people because even my job requires me to build relationships with other people I've always loved change and Northeastern has fulfilled my expectations. You also have plenty of freedom is college because unlike high school you get to pick classes that will lead you closer to your future goals. I also say more freedom because you also get to pick your schedule and most definitely don't have to stay at school for 8 hours like high school.

Assignment #8

Free speech off campus must be protected by Frank D. LoMonte

Summary- LoMonte describes the laws that are being made on students to be more aware of what they say on networking sites such as facebook, twitter, ect. He uses multiple examples from past student experiences that help get his point across.For example, he uses the Tatro v. University of Minnesota case. In this case Amanda Tatro had been called to the student-conduct board because of what she had written on facebook. She had written that she had nicknamed someone in the laboratory "Bernie". She also wrote about stabbing someone with a dissecting knife and many believe it was her ex-boyfriend. A classmate of hers read these messages and forwarded them to to the University of Minnesota authorities. A criminal investigation was filed and although Tatro had no intent of hurting anyone, she was charged and disciplined anyway. Although these laws are being made for students who don't know how to carefully post things on facebook or other social networking devices, I think it's freedom of speech. It seems to me from the Tatro case that she had no intent of harming anyone, but just to joke around on facebook. On the other hand, I do understand that students need to realize  that when you post things, they are viewable to many people and someone may take something you said offensively. My personal opinion is that students should be able to make jokes on facebook because its your site and you control what goes on it. At the same time you should be careful about what you say and how you say it.

Assignment #7

I feel like everyone grows as writers somehow. Looking at my past blog posts, even I have grown. I say this because I realized I had multiple sentence fragments and run-ons in my sentences. I still make the mistake of having a couple here and there, but its an improvement. This class has been helping me immensely on perfecting each individual sentence. I learned how to create sentences that go straight to the point and don't linger off of topic. With this, my paragraphs and papers make much more sense and its not as confusing to the reader. This class and my past English classes teach me something new every year. Every English class I've taken in the past have taught me something different from run-ons to adding details and examples to papers. To be more specific, my papers now include details that are not off topic. If I'm writing a paper about Nike shoes I wont mention anything about the other brands just so it wont get off topic.

Assignment #6

 The rhetorical situation of my ad essay is arguing that Heinz ketchup is better and fresher then the rest. The ad is describing how Heinz is the number one selling ketchup compared the the rest of the brands. The situation of my narrative essay was me growing as a writer and the steps I took to get there. I described how it wasn't easy but with a little help I got to where I needed to be. These two papers are going to be fairly different because the situations and arguments are different in each essay. For the add I'm going to be describing how the audience would be anyone who likes ketchup, the purpose is to get people to buy more of the Heinz ketchup brand, and the tone which would be neutral and not so out there as an advertisement.

Assignment #5

• Purpose-The purpose of this ad is to show people how fresh Heinz Ketchup is. They have sliced the bottle to make it seem like its tomatoes freshly sliced.
• Audience- The target audience for this ad would be anyone who likes ketchup. They are targeting people who think other brands of ketchup are not fresh and making them try Heinz.
• Genre-I learned in my advertising class 2 years ago that the color red in an advertisement appeals to peoples hunger. So when I saw this ad it stood out a lot. I also learned that white space is good space meaning that there shouldn't be a lot of wording on ads because people wont have time to read it or get bored with it fairly quickly.
• Tone- The tone for this ad is neutral. They state in the ad "No one grows ketchup like Heinz" meaning they make the best ketchup or at least that's what they are trying to advertise.

Assignment #4

~ My final paper looks different from by draft because I added more detail about my actual writing process and less about soccer and my story. When we were doing peer review my classmates suggested that idea. I took their advise and my paper reads more smoothly now. I also corrected a couple run ons, fragments, and comma splices.

~ My paper was well organized for the most part and had a clear focus. It told a story how I developed as a writer and the steps I took to get there.

~ Yes, after revising I identified my own pattern of error. I've learned that I'm a little to wordy and had a couple comma splices here and there. I fixed my comma splices by limiting my wording and cutting the sentences down.

~ My revisions mostly came from peer review because it helps when someone else reads your paper. Since the writer already knows what they want to write and how they want their tone to be, its easier for them not to see mistakes in their own writing. On the other hand when someone else reads your writing they don't know what the tone is right away they have to keep reading.

~The strongest aspect of my essay is how I compare what I do on the field as a soccer player to becoming a strong writer. The weakest would be summarizing everything in the conclusion.

Assignment #3

Good papers!

~Detail- One difference between an A and a C paper would be detail. I say this because if a paper lacks detail, it wont be as interesting to the reader. After all what writer doesn't want to grab the readers attention. My personal opinion is that when a writer states personal detail it stands out more. It stands out because the reader can really relate to what the writers trying to say. Detail is also important because it paints a picture in the readers head so they can imagine what the writer is saying. When writers add enough detail it makes it easier for the reader to relate to and therefore continue reading.

~Examples- Another difference between an A and a C paper are the examples. I say this because how can a writer get their point across with little to no examples. Examples may vary from facts you find on the internet or even personal examples. My writing involves a lot of examples because that's how I feel like I'd connect to the reader more. If writers didn't use examples their papers would be boring and most readers would lose interest quickly. Examples can also effect the reader because they can relate to some of your examples, especially the personal ones.

~Quality over quantity- The last reason that differentiates an A and a C paper would be quantity. I say this because no ones going to want to read a paper that's ten pages long and be reading the same thing on every page over and over again. My point is that if papers are short with a lot of detail, example, and get to the point there is no need to make it longer. This gets very boring on the readers side as well because the first thing a good reader does is look at how many pages the reading is before they read it. As a reader is reading and they have to read the same thing on every page they will lose interest.

~Easiest/hardest- The most easiest thing for to do while writing is adding a lot of detail that relates to my topic. I find topics that i can support with a lot of strong details. The hardest would most likely be giving examples because sometimes its hard relating a certain example back to a topic. For instance if I'm writing a paper about a certain book I read and I want to give a specific example from the book, It's going to take time to find one that fits in with my paper.

Assignment #2

~ I may write about my experience as a writer. I would tell my audience how i started low and progressed through the years to becoming an efficient writer. The main conflict in this narrative would be me trying to progress as a writer and the steps i took to get there. Some positives for this narrative topic would be that I'd have a lot of examples and details to write about. The fact that I've been writing since I was a kid (formally or informally) gives me a lot to write about. A con in writing a narrative this would be going off into tangents and giving detail that's not necessary to the paper. I'd be writing this essay to other writers to inform them how i grew and continue growing as a writer.


~ The next topic I may write about is an embarrassing eighth grade graduation moment. This would be a more humorous paper for my audience. I say this because although my embarrassing moment wasn't funny in my eyes, it was funny to all the others including my family. In this paper I'd write about how I fell during graduation and the after effects that took place. I would tell my audience how I had been so looking forward to graduation and how excited I was to walk across the stage. My biggest fear was falling and I can definitely say my fear became a reality that night.What I thought would be one of the most exciting nights of my life turned into a disaster within seconds. My main purpose for this essay would be to tell a funny story and to entertain my audience. The pros of this essay would be telling the audience a funny story and I would also have a lot of detail. Some of more challenging aspects of this essay would be organization. Due to the fact this story took place about five years ago its going to be a little tougher getting all the details in order.






~My last essay topic would be a moment In my life were I felt courageous and did something I'd never thought I'd do. I would explain in this essay how i went on my first roller coaster a couple years ago at six flags. I'm extremely terrified of heights so to say that i faced my fears an rode a roller coaster is a big deal for me. There would be many pros to a paper like this because I remember every moment of this particular day and I'd have more then enough detail and examples for my audience. Some of the cons would be adding too much detail (if possible). The main audience for this paper would most likely be everyone because of the fact that anyone would enjoy reading something like this. The purpose of this essay is to tell a story about how I faced my fears and how others should also overcome theirs.

Assignment #1

My personal opinion is that everyone should be a strong writer regardless of their professions later on in life. I'm taking English 101 for this exact reason. I want to learn how to become a strong more intelligent writer and be able to get my points across with strong examples. My high school teachers always told me, in order to acquire a decent job, you need to know how to write. We use writing everyday whether its formal or informal. We use writing (just how we discussed in class) In texts, emails, letters, blogs, Facebook, journals, reports twitter, reports, notes etc. Every year I've taken a writing class I've learned something new. Last semester in developmental writing, I learned how to use specific examples and evidence to support my claims. I also learned a lot of grammatical errors that I need to watch out for while I'm writing. I'm making my way up to be a chemistry major and I know you need to use ample amounts of examples and details in the lab write ups. Being a chemistry major requires a lot of attention to writing, so I'm hoping to gain the right techniques to better my future as a chem major. Neiu might require this course to create a better writing process for students. I say this because although students might think their on top of their game thinking their the best witters, this class can reassure them that everyone can be better writers and practice makes perfect.