Assignment #7

I feel like everyone grows as writers somehow. Looking at my past blog posts, even I have grown. I say this because I realized I had multiple sentence fragments and run-ons in my sentences. I still make the mistake of having a couple here and there, but its an improvement. This class has been helping me immensely on perfecting each individual sentence. I learned how to create sentences that go straight to the point and don't linger off of topic. With this, my paragraphs and papers make much more sense and its not as confusing to the reader. This class and my past English classes teach me something new every year. Every English class I've taken in the past have taught me something different from run-ons to adding details and examples to papers. To be more specific, my papers now include details that are not off topic. If I'm writing a paper about Nike shoes I wont mention anything about the other brands just so it wont get off topic.

Assignment #6

 The rhetorical situation of my ad essay is arguing that Heinz ketchup is better and fresher then the rest. The ad is describing how Heinz is the number one selling ketchup compared the the rest of the brands. The situation of my narrative essay was me growing as a writer and the steps I took to get there. I described how it wasn't easy but with a little help I got to where I needed to be. These two papers are going to be fairly different because the situations and arguments are different in each essay. For the add I'm going to be describing how the audience would be anyone who likes ketchup, the purpose is to get people to buy more of the Heinz ketchup brand, and the tone which would be neutral and not so out there as an advertisement.

Assignment #5

• Purpose-The purpose of this ad is to show people how fresh Heinz Ketchup is. They have sliced the bottle to make it seem like its tomatoes freshly sliced.
• Audience- The target audience for this ad would be anyone who likes ketchup. They are targeting people who think other brands of ketchup are not fresh and making them try Heinz.
• Genre-I learned in my advertising class 2 years ago that the color red in an advertisement appeals to peoples hunger. So when I saw this ad it stood out a lot. I also learned that white space is good space meaning that there shouldn't be a lot of wording on ads because people wont have time to read it or get bored with it fairly quickly.
• Tone- The tone for this ad is neutral. They state in the ad "No one grows ketchup like Heinz" meaning they make the best ketchup or at least that's what they are trying to advertise.

Assignment #4

~ My final paper looks different from by draft because I added more detail about my actual writing process and less about soccer and my story. When we were doing peer review my classmates suggested that idea. I took their advise and my paper reads more smoothly now. I also corrected a couple run ons, fragments, and comma splices.

~ My paper was well organized for the most part and had a clear focus. It told a story how I developed as a writer and the steps I took to get there.

~ Yes, after revising I identified my own pattern of error. I've learned that I'm a little to wordy and had a couple comma splices here and there. I fixed my comma splices by limiting my wording and cutting the sentences down.

~ My revisions mostly came from peer review because it helps when someone else reads your paper. Since the writer already knows what they want to write and how they want their tone to be, its easier for them not to see mistakes in their own writing. On the other hand when someone else reads your writing they don't know what the tone is right away they have to keep reading.

~The strongest aspect of my essay is how I compare what I do on the field as a soccer player to becoming a strong writer. The weakest would be summarizing everything in the conclusion.