Assignment #14

For my portfolio I chose to revise my writing process essay. I chose this one because it's an essay that was personal to me so which ever way i choose to revise it, it will be stronger. My strengths of this essay were that i added a lot of specific and personal detail and my weakness was my conclusion. I say this because I think i could have summed everything up in a better way that was more appealing to the reader. To effectively revise my essay I will go through each paragraph to make sure it relates back to my thesis and makes sense.